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Thesis Statement

Shaiunho
Hello! I am having trouble creating a thesis statement as i have never done it before... Can someone help me? The topic was something about new year goals, priority and whatnot. Below are what i listed while creating and were some feedbacks from my professor as i had gotten some of my thesis statements rejected: 'In this new year my goals are to...' 'In 2025, i want to prioritize..' GOALS: - have a healthy lifestyle - explore new hobby - make a change - learn new skills - focus on my personal goals - prepare for future career - have better sleep Balance the idea Be specific Don't repeat words My chosen goals: balanced nutrition (healthy lifestyle) technical expertise (learn new skills) career readiness (prepare for future) If one of the goals/priority are written in nouns then it all has to be noun or if adjective then adjective.. This is my current thesis statement that i made: In 2025, my focus will be on balanced nutrition, technical expertise, and career readiness. Thank you in advance for your help! 🥹🥹

3 comments

SnooDonuts6494
I think the prof wants something much more specific and measurable. For example, instead of "balanced nutrition" you could say "lose 5kg of weight", instead of "technical expertise" say "Obtain Microsoft Certification in the C# programming language". Try to think of things that can be measured. They don't have to be things you *really* intend to achieve, necessarily. Just plausible.
Agreeable-Fee6850
I’m a little confused. In academic English, a thesis statement is part of the introduction to an essay. Is this what you are looking for? Or do you just need a statement? “The New Year is traditionally a time for making resolutions. However, it is importantly to choose resolutions carefully. They should be… Thus, after careful consideration, the chosen goals for 2025 are based around achieving a balanced diet, learning new skills and being better prepared for a future career in …”
jasonpettus
A thesis statement is a pretty simple concept, even if they're sometimes difficult to write; it's one sentence that explains an entire article or essay. So if we look at your list, for example, we can see that most of your goals have to do with doing something brand-new you haven't done before, while a few are about continuing to do something you're already doing, or getting better at something you're already doing. So a good thesis statement for this might be something like, "In 2025, I hope to start several new activities, including new hobbies and preparing for a future career, while also maintaining the habits I already have, and hopefully get better at them." As you can see, while this doesn't give details about any of your list's items, it's a pretty good summary of what the entire list is, so that someone else can read this single sentence and get a good general idea of what the full list is about. Usually these kinds of thesis statements are written about an entire academic paper, whether that's ten pages or a hundred pages, so it makes more sense to have one sentence that can easily explain the entire thing. Here it looks a little weirder to have a summary of something short like a list, but I imagine your teacher is having you do it this way to get you used to the idea first. Once you're writing entire multi-page papers, your thesis statements might sound more like, "This paper explores the economic hardships that took place across the entire world at once after the 2008 Financial Crisis, focusing in on the differing rates of recovery among industrialized nations compared to developing nations."