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Does it sound natural?

AlreadyLa
Q: Tell me what you like about swimming A: Swimming feels less tiring compared to other sports. This is because other sports make me sweat a lot, which can feel uncomfortable, but swimming doesn’t, so it feels refreshing. Especially in winter, when it’s too cold to work out, Ican swim in warm water, and after swimming , I always feel refreshed. That’s why I like swimming the most among all exercises.

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Environmental-Day517
The wording sounds very natural. There are a few too many commas/run on sentences, though. I might change “among all” to “out of all” but that’s me.
KingAdamXVII
This sounds fairly natural when spoken out loud, but is poorly written. The phrases do not flow together and there are way too many commas. Also there are a couple specific things that do not sound natural when spoken out loud (in my opinion). Specifically: >Swimming feels less tiring compared to other sports. ~~This is because~~ Other sports make me sweat a lot, which can feel uncomfortable, but swimming doesn’t, so it feels refreshing. Especially in winter, when it’s too cold to work out, I can swim in warm water, and after swimming I always feel refreshed. That’s why I like swimming the most *compared with other* exercises.
09EpicGameFlame
Sounds great! Good job. Only comments are A) You've used a lot of commas. This DOES demonstrate that you understand them very proficiently, because from what I can tell you used them correctly, but a few more sentence breaks could help. B) A few little typing errors you're probably aware are wrong. Like "Ican swim" and "after swimming , I always" (space before comma shouldn't be there) Keep it up!